Audience Feedback for Rough Cut

We received very consistent criticism of our rough cut. Almost every person who told us their views said that the storyline was too repetitive. There was also a criticism of the way in which the guitar shots were used, and how perhaps they were too dark. Furthermore, we cut too often between the shots of Glenn singing against the tree, and when he is playing the guitar.

There is no variety in the way we filmed and this has lead to us planning on how to add more variety into the video.
To do this, we have planned to increase the relevance of the girl in our video (Lucy Fry) to the storyline, and to build the idea of them [Glenn and Lucy] being together. We thought of perhaps different locations to film it in, as well as what the storyline would entail. We decided on elaborating on the idea of Lucy dying as we used some imagery in the mise en scene to show this. The red ribbons symbolise depression, and the rose is a traditional symbol of death. We therefore elaborated on the idea and plan to introduce the idea of Lucy has died, and we see Glenn reliving memories of times with her, but she almost fades from view.


The other main criticism we had was at the beginning of the video, when Glenn begins to lip sync it is out of time with the vocals. This of course needed to be changed, and when we watched the video through afterwards, we began to notice a few more places in which the lip syncing was slightly out of time. Changing this was easy to do and makes the whole video seem a lot more professional.